Rain, insidious rain
Cannibal rain
Impoverishing rain
Droplets, tormenting droplets
Ledges, drums for the droplets
Punishment for the eardrums
Droplets
Fall, only fall
Fallen leaves, pavements soaked
Drenched in leaves
Putrid leaves
Puddles bitting at our shoes
Puddles sipping the whole army of clouds
Puddles
Rain, more rain, only rain
Women growing sad, their wrinkles follow the droplets’ pattern on the sheet of glass
Their lives grow roots that meet the trees’ roots under pavements
Women
Knots germinating
Brewing new seasons
Knots
But for now
Rain, insidious rain
Cannibal rain
Nauseating rain
Breaking knees rain
Great use of Epistrophe, Anaphora, two forms of repetition used as a poetic device for creating a strong sense of feeling maddened by incessant Autumn rain with a foreboding of a long hard winter looming ahead. Epizeuxis , which is when a word or phrase is repeated twice or more times together , is the only form of repetition the poem does not use . A possible way of using it would be , say, “ Fall, fall , only fall “ or “ Rain, Rain , only Rain “ and so on . Epizeuxis in fact is considered to the most powerful forms of repetition in literary writing , as for example in Shakespeare’s song , “ Hark, Hark the lark “ .
Thank you so much, Amita Paul! Thank you for your suggestion too! I will ponder upon it!
Both form and content coalesce in this absorbing poem about autumn rain.
Thank you so warmly, VijayNair, my friend!
I read this poem while in the backdrop of news of floods on the t.v and both painted the fury,fury of the matriarches cursing the rains and rains cursing the humans.Rainfall oh so furious fall.
Thank you so much, Nalini!
after check I am correcting spelling of matriarchs in my post
A terrific tour-de-force that imbues even a natural meteorological phenomenon such as rain with malevolent,sinister character traits.Excellent!
My warmest thanks, dear Louis Kasatkin!
Fall’s hues permeate through profound words.
Lovely, layered, lyrical.