Sleepless
Dreamless night
Assuming fancies
Of possibilities
Dreams indecipherable.
In a mirror black
A dirty moon
Smirks
In a dirtier sky.
Drowsy
Inalert day
Speaking of promises
Unkept and broken
Reassuming pleasures
In eyes utterly vapid.
A persistent shadow
Follows
With a burden of memories.
The mirror black
Consumes
The soul of the sun
Storms up a dust
And covers
The face of the moon
Day and night merge
Into an undefinable mass
Of hours.
Sleepless
Dreamless at night
Drowsy
Inalert in day
I remain
Alone
Eyes half-shut.
It conveys to me,the reader, strands of what could possibly be delirium/dreaming/insomnia;one condition feeding into the other.with references to external things such as the sun and moon,the reader’s own attempt at understanding the cause and nature of the poem’s disquiet are rendered conditional.”A mirror black” is a very distinctive turn of phrase that I was listening to only the other day. The song,”Black Mirror” on Arcade Fire’s “Neon Bible”album. And indeed their lyrics are not entirely dissimilar.
Thanks very much Louis Kasatkin. Neither have I heard the song, nor read the lyrics, nor have I heard of the group/band. I find mirrors very intriguing, with references to them in many of my poems and I happen to have two framed black mirrors at home, the reflection of light in them seems pale and unreal. I take the comparison as a huge compliment. Thank you.
delirium will suffice
I too find it a tad cryptic Ron.Would you care to elaborate or expound on the merest thread of “delirium will suffice”which was part of my original observations of the poem itself?
Could you elaborate on your comment please Ron Gabbott? I’m afraid I do not quite get what you wish to say.
I expected Ron to come up with an elaboration on his previous cryptic comment. I hope he is satisfied with my commentary on my poem which is that the poem depicts the state of urban consciousness. Yes, in a stupor, when the consciousness is foggy and eyes half-shut to the pressing realities of life. And when the mind is not alert, disjointed and malformed ideas of self and surroundings are expressed incoherently through a delirium.
Lovely piece.