Happiness slips through the grip,
like the thinnest sand,
on the beach of life,
leaving only barbed memories behind,
in a never-ending spiral.
Yet, we hang on,
like charged particles
in the air.
Destiny Poets
Uniting and celebrating the best "Writers" and "Poetry" from around the world centred out of Destiny Church Wakefield
Short, vivid and effective. The abrupt end leaves the reader hanging like the charged particles hanging in the air that it refers to.
Hi Mam, Thank you for your beautiful remark.
Succinct and so realistic.
Thank you so much for reading it!
Very nice …few words and more emotional content….
Thanks a lot for your feedback!
Exquisite in style and content.Admirable economy of expression.
Dynamics of a charged overview gives ulterior meaning to the whole. Exquisite!
I was experimenting trying to express myself with few words!
Reality so succinctly put with economical use of words.
Thanks a lot Brindha, for reading it!