When you were born
You didn’t know it then
Jesus already died
For your sin
He gave you choices
Way back then
To begin your life
Once again
Don’t follow the bait
Get your head on straight
Cause that’s the way to wait
With a clean slate
Being in the hood
That’s no good
Going with God
That’s understood.
When He walks by your side
He will be your guide
When He walks before
He will open the door
Walk with God
An engaging poem that presents its Faith perspective with alacrity.
Editorial footnote :-
Given the poem’s intended brevity, I don’t think that the middle two lines in the last stanza actually add anything. I also think that the final line ” So walk with God” might be sharpened by dropping the “So”. In fact as i write this, it occurs to me that ” Walk with God” would prove to be a more apt title for the poem .What do you think?
I think after reading it again that you are right. It does make a good rap type song, but walking with God is actually the intent. I plan to change it now.
An excellent faith- centered. poetic composition.
Thank you VijayNair. You are always so kind in you comments. I always appreciate the input.
Attractive title.. loved the last stanza..
Thank you Sunila K. I am glam you liked it. I appreciate your input.
In fact poems are not meant to be rhymes . However this is not to say that rhymes can not be poems.
Thank you for your comment Lokesh Roy. I appreciate any input you might have.
I have often tried to write prose type poems, but they don’t seem to work for me. I don’t understand why. Maybe you could give me some input that would help.