Slow as acorns time awakens ,
shadows lengthen ;
life and death flit
across the moon lit fields ,
waving flags at the staring moon’s face ,
lit by death’s silent flit across flags ,
waved by staring faces
flitting across silent shadows ,
of grass and death
of fields and their silence.
Liked the frugality of the vocabulary with the repetition of ‘flit’ and ‘flag’ and ‘shadows’. Maybe instead of ‘silent shadows’ you could have reinforced it with ‘flagging shadows’ (or would that have been a step too far). But then ‘silence’ would have lost its ‘silent’ partner……oh dear, I’m rambling.
thank you Keith for your astute comments,which I always value and appreciate. “Ramblin’ man” was US #1 for the Allman Brothers Band back in ’72.