Ego

A moment of life came screeching at him,

Taking away his naive self,

Life came with it’s show of reality.

He squandered, he leapt, he fought, he wept,

After all those struggling moments,

He surrendered selflessly,

He had no demands,but just performed his deeds,

Now, life took a steep turn,

A turn, which took him to a clueless land,

It was a promised land of fame and wealth,

As he traveled in the land, he gathered wealth & fame, to flourish and settle.

Lost in this enduring land, intoxicated and self obsessed,

Another moment came to soothe him,

He blatantly captured it perceiving it as a moment of swell,

With a gush of reality, a lightning struck,

All lost in vain, he was back to his original self.

Ego stopped him from surrendering this time.

Now a ramshackle soul, he lost all that he possessed.

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6 thoughts on “Ego

  1. Louis Kasatkin

    ” Ego ” shows a great deal of promise as a narrative poem.For the casual reader , the poem has the ambience of a re-telling of myth and legend about it.We are told that , “as he travelled in the land he gathered metals ,he gathered his name..” But who was ” he ” ? I would omit, ” he gathered metals “,but that still leaves the reader with less than an acceptably finished product. The line ” Ego killed his surrender this time” simply makes no grammatical sense at all. In conclusion,serious consideration ought to be given by the author to undertaking some minor editorial revision as soon as possible. The final line highlights this necessity, replacing the word ” lost ” with “losing ” would enhance its intended impact considerably.

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