Crumble into Cosmic Dust

She could no longer decipher

The architectural designs

Of her feelings.

She felt like a green seaweed

In a tumultuous sea.

 

Her self-contained look vanished

With a sudden downpour

Of calamities unfathomable,

Insurmountable,

Which nothing could elucidate.

Tangled and tied

In a spaghetti-like tangle,

She listened to the painful

Beats of her heart’s misery.

 

Her eyes moistened

As she thought how

The pristine scintillating beauty

Of her heart had been defaced,

The immaculate tenderness

Of her soul turned to charcoal.

Rose replete with thorns,

She was stripped of the rose

And left with the thorns.

 

The music of her finely tuned instruments disappeared.

Left with the loathsome notes

Of her eulogy of pain,

She looked at the pale ethereal moonlight,

Sipping the honey of solitude in quietude.

Self-contained and solemn,

Plunged in a sea of silence,

Caught between two polarities,

She allowed herself to crumble

Into cosmic dust.

 

Pramila Khadun.

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About pramilakhadun

I am the holder of a Bsc degree in Food and Nutrition from S.N.D.T University,Pune,India.Have taught this subject in a private institution for almost thirty-five years.Currently, I am retired and travel alot with my husband Raj, daughters Dr Rajnee and Priyum and son Airline Captain.Had my first book of poetry published by Minerva press, London and other two in Mauritius.More coming soon.I love poetry and enjoy reading poems of poets across the world and I feel Destiny Poets is the right place for me.

7 thoughts on “Crumble into Cosmic Dust

  1. Louis Kasatkin

    An emotionally penetrating soliloquy which examines the vicissitudes of ennui and alienation.

    EDITORIAL FOOTNOTE ( For the benefit of the author )
    You will note that two substantive corrections have been made to spelling. First to the work’s title which got published as – Crumbles into cosmic Dusk (sic). As the last line verifies, you intended ” Dust” to be in the title. Second – your original and uncorrected – ” Desighs ” (sic) in line 2 has been amended to ” designs”.
    In Verse 2 you over-egg the proverbial pudding by adding the line -In a spaghetti-like tangle- after the concise and punchy preceding line – ” tangled and tied” . You then follow on from that to – “she listened to the..”where you insert ” painful” quite unnecessarily since in the next line you refer to her heart beats misery. Less is always more.

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  2. pramilakhadun Post author

    Thanks my dear friend Louis for the corrections which I really appreciate.The first two were printing mistakes and the third one is an intelligent correction which I appreciate lots.Thanks once again .

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