(inspired by Anne Rice’s novel, “ANGEL TIME”), a dark poetic prose
His life had been an abominable curse
sister and brother brutally murdered by their own insane Mother
corpses of his dear ones bathed in a pool of blood
Yes, a young boy like him need not witness such
horrific act cultivated by a sick mind of his Mom gone mad.
The head of the family, an irresponsible bad egg of a father
treated him like dirt and thought of him as a sissy
all he wanted was to provide a good life for his family
change their fortune and step out of the eerie gloom.
These series of unfortunate, disgusting events is much for him to bear
etched an enormous hatred in his young, innocent and fragile heart
Until the “Right Man” as he was called came along and hired him as an assassin
took advantage of his weeping, weary soul as he cast his sweet revenge.
The merciless gun had been his constant companion
as he thought of himself as a special agent on every mission
his poor soul at times reminisce his daunting, dark past
which was the reason to cast these sheer violence around.
One fair day he met his designated guardian angel,
who was dying to present himself as the one who
could help him redeem himself from the pit he is in
of which he then sheepishly obliged to change the direction of his life.
His angel let him see what his messy life had been
as he encountered all the people who inflicted curses upon him again
Each of them having sufferings of their own
he then but realized all of them were just mere victims of circumstances in this cruel world.
Blinding lights he saw as pages of his life flashed before him over a glass wall
as warm tears come running down his now matured countenance
aged by the years he wasted dragging himself with his evil fury
and in a split second the last flash woke him up from this frightful dream.
Elizabeth E. Castillo Copyright 2012
” Angel in the midst ” qualifies as being ” ekphrasic “,which means that it is a work of art based upon another work of art in a different form, in this case a poem derived and inspired from a novel. Whilst attempting the ekphrasic form can be adventurous, I think this particular attempt requires some serious and thorough revision. Some of the lines of poetry are way too long and verbose. It is axiomatic to the poetic craft, that Poetry is always about using less words,not more.
i fully agree with louis.. why dont u try, lizzy, to rewrite it, this time with more poetry in it, n the theme is very touching indeed….