A Brush with the morning sun
Soaking the mellow sunlight inside
Infusing all life; luring a new wave.
The innermost secrets of nature
In every atom and molecule,
In search of peace and harmony.
The images we build and destroy
Clad in winter white or in summer red
In falling leaves, in tiny raindrops,
It does not matter in which way you
Think and make your move forward
Towards dream and the powerful force
Can we be able to deliver well?
Leaving for a new life, a new vista,
We always want to return…we know you at the end.
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” A brush with the morning sun ” .expresses its themes and subject matter both crisply and clearly. However , from and editor’s perspective there are a couple of points that perhaps with hindsight might need some consideration. The line , third from end ,that reads “Can we be able to deliver well”, in order to be grammatically has to be one of,either , ” Can we deliver well” or ” Will we be able to deliver well”. The second “point” is the ending.Endings imply singularity;what this poem attempts is more than one. The addditional ” … we know you at the end ” could be THE ending or, “We always want to return”.. But to have one follow on the other undermines both.